Far too much dialogue.
Just stop the characters talking incessantly; have them take a breath and actually do things. We might actually learn something about them that way.
As it stands, it was hard to feel I knew any of the characters and so impossible to care what happened to them.
And the comedy is very weak (e.g. The "joke" in the trailer about the reason for the rented room being so cheap).
Just stop the characters talking incessantly; have them take a breath and actually do things. We might actually learn something about them that way.
As it stands, it was hard to feel I knew any of the characters and so impossible to care what happened to them.
And the comedy is very weak (e.g. The "joke" in the trailer about the reason for the rented room being so cheap).